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    dots Submission Name: Eyes Like Winter Skydots

    Author: blu_kittin
    ASL Info:    20/F/Garden of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    6.15 - 711/397/207
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 568
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       I will write what I wish. I write from my soul, and not you or anyone else can take that from me.

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    dotsEyes Like Winter Skydots

    You told me once, not long ago
    That you feared my words and prose
    So I am writing this today to let you know

    You are more to me than a sad tale
    A love than spans all my lives
    You watch over me, a guardian angel
    Worth more than just a couple tries

    You asked me not to write of you
    But you broke all your promises
    So it's high time I break a few

    Your eyes are like a winter sky
    Clear and lovely, and just as cold
    Your lips so lush, now pulled tight
    Forming words cruel and bold

    You claim to love me like no other
    But then you tear my soul asunder
    With deeds that choke and smother

    Submitted on 2011-02-20 13:02:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Earlier comments capture my own feelings. Very well done.
    | Posted on 2011-02-21 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      yes, this is sneaky good...

    so smooth and subtle in its power...translation...
    trust---once it's gone, it's gone...

    over the many years of relationships, i did learn one thing...

    could never rekindle the trust once it's burned out...

    i like the reciprocation in this..the getting back but seemingly done with a smile...a paradox
    "your eyes clear and lovely/ and just as cold"

    like a bright sunny winter's day...from inside the house...looks warm and inviting..but as soon as we are through the door...bam! the frigid temperature hits us hard..

    just like in relationships...this is universal.
    | Posted on 2011-02-20 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      No pain matches the pain of broken trust from someone you love. It is mind altering, life changing, heart breaking. It causes the heart to bleed even while beating, and the soul to hide in dark places.

    This is terse and stark, but is written with the skill of an accomplished author!
    | Posted on 2011-02-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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