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    dots Submission Name: Full Moon Nightdots
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    Author: sweet_rayne
    ASL Info:    25/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.86 - 493/464/111
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 661
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 579



    Description:
       this is really just something i was thinking about and needed to put it down before i forgot. i know it needs some work like i said its still in the rough stages but even with that being said i also kinda like it in its unpolished state


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    dotsFull Moon Nightdots
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    I cry and call out
    hoping to hear the answer
    but all i hear is the
    silence of a full moon night

    The solitude comforts me
    yet i yearn to share it
    and knowing its not possible
    in the silence of a full moon night

    This pain is still there
    deep inside me chest
    a dull ache is my companion
    in the silence of a full moon night

    There is nothing left to say
    There is no body next to mine
    There is no cure for the pain
    in the silence of a full moon night




    Submitted on 2011-02-20 23:11:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it because I can relate to it. It honestly gave me goosebumps. I use to just 'chill' on my porch late at night doing the same thing. The pain was accompanied by the night sky, but morning was always on it's way.
    Epic poem my friend
    | Posted on 2011-02-27 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      A meeting with the moon can sure bring out in us all, many sorts of hidden feelings. This is a great abstract write.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2011-02-24 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      As a whole i generally like this poem. there r few spelling mistakes. I like that the ending of each is "in the silence of a full moon night" i think it might flow better if it was something like "in the silence of a full moons light " all n all good : )
    | Posted on 2011-02-24 00:00:00 | by Rehian | [ Reply to This ]


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