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    dots Submission Name: GONE ARE THE DAYSdots
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    Author: Roula
    ASL Info:    18/female
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46/64/45
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 555
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    Description:
       For my Papou (grandfather)


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    dotsGONE ARE THE DAYSdots
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    when you could take me for a walk
    and tell me a story,
    one I heard yesterday,
    and the day before.
    Not to mention
    every day the previous week.

    The sun beats down
    creating a mirage;
    its better to focus on the dry grass
    & the faint musk of olives
    baking in the heat
    & the cicadas buzzing.

    I walk slow to keep up
    even though I want to explore.
    I'm too young to understand
    the grief that will come later.
    The day where I will no longer be able
    to listen to a story
    I already heard.

    I want to follow you back up the steep hill,
    I would like to know you.
    I'm not just sad because I'm grieving;
    I got so little time to spend with you
    & I wasted it being a child.

    Perhaps I am being selfish.

    Your life was meant for that hill
    and it became twisted,
    constricted
    and difficult.

    It was time to join her
    & let go of your earthly pains.
    I wish I were there for you to wave goodbye to.

    I'll hold on to that story
    I heard so many times 15 years ago




    Submitted on 2011-02-22 00:36:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a wonderful memorial for your grandfather. I am sure he is happy in Heaven with your lovely and loving poem.
    | Posted on 2011-02-22 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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