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    dots Submission Name: Drama Queendots
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    Author: angela~
    Elite Ratio:    6.45 - 1613/720/52
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    Description:
       Let them eat cake.



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    dotsDrama Queendots
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    Sometimes she imagines herself betrayed
    and self pity becomes her last meal.
    She rubs fragrant creams into her skin
    and rims her eyes in darkest kohl.
    Imagining herself to be Cleopatra
    languishing on gold threaded pillows
    an asp held to her breast.

    Sometimes she dresses in satin and pearls,
    posing prettily on her throne,
    her legs artfully displayed in front of her.
    Daring anyone the gall to look,
    and hating them if they don't.
    She fancies herself to be the temptress empress
    fallen from the pages of a fairytale book
    with her choice of princes from which to choose.

    The peasants see her as Marie Antoinette
    powdered, and pampered, bedecked, and adorned.
    They are sick of eating her cake.
    Gently they place her regal throat on the block,
    lest she get a splinter,
    before the blade comes down.
    They sever all ties with the drama queen.





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      hey! it's a long one! You wrote a long poem! Yaaaaaaay!!! teheheheheheheh woo oo oo oo oo oo oo tt! he he he hie he he he he! actually the legnth of the poem shouldn't matter, it is just that i thought that you only did short ones. i was wrong. Anyway.... yeah. I enjoyed the poem- i am nto very good at critiquing stuff that is better than mine.... Seriously, i am not. not at all! I lquite enjoyed the vivid imagery however i did not find the ending suitable and complimenting to the rest of it. :-/ tallie- ho! -hillarie
    | Posted on 2004-11-13 00:00:00 | by falloutgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      i so remember this one! and i remember absolutely loving it the first time round and this time aint no different...
    i love the woe is me feel to it and the different ways different ppl see her... im sure (as i believe i was sure last time i read this) that i am she you write of... someones gonna OFF WITH HER HEAD in my direction sometime soon... but oh well... good while it lasted. its awesome to read this again!
    | Posted on 2004-11-09 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      OOOOh!!
    This is a fave... I feel like this. Oh me, oh woe... I love all the [censored] that comes flying and revel in it. And yeah... Look at me.. why aren't they looking at me? And then stamping feet and tantrums, indeed as a fairytale queen but perhaps in the mould of an Ugly Sister rather than Cinderella. Aww this is just such a baby that it's going in my faves.
    My time's coming close... I'm too much of a prima donna and someone is going to snap and take me down a peg or two. It *has* to happen-people wouldn't put up with such arrogant behaviour all the time, right?
    I don't, and that's getting up noses. Mhhhmm.
    Bring it on!

    Good work girl, this piece is so decadent and... indulgent!... this has really inspired an idea that.. I just gotta try out later!
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      Hell yeah, this poem has everything that I want. a Fine ass woman and her getting her head sliced off by the old quick cut. BUT the thing I liked most about this poem is the way you started it
    Sometimes she imagines herself betrayed
    and self pity becomes her last meal
    you kinda just left it right there. Getting into the elegance and egotistical things that this hoe likes to do, and then at the end you assure the reader that the beginning wasn't for nothing. ..I liked that
    Thanks for the poem.
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by SKillz_Heckle | [ Reply to This ]
      i remember this one! i love the ending, too.

    Gently they place her regal throat on the block/
    lest she get a splinter...

    WHACK! i've known quite a few of these type of ladies. so high maintenance and everything is always about them. you've portrayed her quite well and witty here! i'm glad you re-posted this one!
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      "Daring anyone the gall to look,
    and hating them if they don't"

    This two lines are so timeless, especially with all the drama queens that I know here that are EVER so purrrty. I sometimes act like a jerk (well not really) to all the ubermegahubbahubba hot chicks that come into my store. Like I don't really do anything extra for them, don't really look at them, or try to be super friendly. But if a mediocore chick comes in before or after them, i'm all "Hi! How you doin! Fine weather today, aye?" then the hot chick comes up "Hi." *rings stuff up* "Have a good day" and then i walk away. haha. They look so confused and leave the store. :)
    ~Aaron
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by MusingMinstrel | [ Reply to This ]
      wow..this is a great poem...you described everything perfectly and its as if i can picture her in my mind..great visualsation...the ending was a bit off tho...i dont know why..i wanna know what ties do the peasants have... and is this Maria character a peasant? or is she royalty? but its good to keep your readers guessing...its a great poem, and keep up the good writes

    ~eternal darkness~
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by eternaldarkness | [ Reply to This ]


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