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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 447
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       I love you yet I'm not sure if i'm In Love with you.. I know very little about you.. all I want, is a family.. a family


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    dotsThem...dots
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    I lye here near you as you dream,
    Dream of things I am unaware of,
    Possibly seeing the faces of your ex-wives I constantly am comparing myself to
    I lye here as I wonder...
    Do you really love as you say you do, or am I a quick fix for you?

    I am reminded every day of the scars I caused myself that are now ravaging this body of mine
    I dont have to be reminded that I look different than other women
    I know this for a fact
    I’m not perfect I know this, yet I try to be everything you want, everything you look for

    I know nothing of your past life but you know all to well what I am all about
    I feel as if I've got to beg and plead for details
    Simple things..
    Nothing too in depth
    and even if it were, why should it matter?
    We've been together for a year!




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