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    dots Submission Name: To not tell you I Love Youdots
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    Author: heartless_
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    dotsTo not tell you I Love Youdots
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    Its been 12 days now since you left,
    Told me you just didnt love me anymore.
    The pain came quick and hard,
    Trying to understand what happened?

    Just last week you still loved me,
    Yet not even 5 days later you say its not there,
    How can things just go from great to not
    How do I not tell you I love you?

    Through this all Ive noticed one thing,
    Youre not affected at all, its like it was all a lie,
    Youre perfectly ok to talk to me,
    While I break down at just your picture,
    Or mention of you name

    How do I go on and not tell you I love you.
    You want me to move on and be strong,
    But how can I be when you cant even tell me why.
    You say you want to stay friends, but I cant

    Every time I look at you all I see is pain and lies.
    You told me youd never leave,
    So tell me why did I have to say bye?

    Im so sick of telling those that promised to stay,
    Goodbye in the end as if they forgot.
    Im sick of the broken promises,
    Those I love you that arent real, all the lies.
    Everything that we were

    Tell me how Im supposed to be ok after this,
    When I cant even read over my own poem
    Without the crying starting again,
    Tell me how to stop loving you?

    How am I supposed to stop?
    Wanting you with me at night,
    Looking at my phone wanting to hear your voice,
    The feel of your arms around me,
    The sounds of your laugh.
    How am I supposed to just not want these things?

    If I could stop loving you I would,
    But for now all I got is to work on not telling you,
    If I dont say it enough will I fall out of love?




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      So much emotion in this piece, I teared up while I was reading. It was very well written
    | Posted on 2011-02-25 00:00:00 | by TheInvisible | [ Reply to This ]


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