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    dots Submission Name: THIS IS THE MOMENTdots

    Author: Roula
    ASL Info:    18/female
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46/64/45
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTHIS IS THE MOMENTdots

    the moment after many months where
    everything changed.

    Your words took me by surprise
    for I'm not really even sure that I know
    what they mean.
    Its a word used to plug holes & gaps
    of all shapes an sizes,
    a word construed into a holiday
    of pink & red, chocolates & flowers,
    a word conveyed as pain & joy
    in songs, books, movies.

    Then there's the two of us;
    I'm not sure which hole to plug with this word-
    where it fits best.
    It's not this word I don't wish to fall in to
    but rather the fear and the potential of pain.

    This is the same moment where after many years
    of hard work and self exploration
    I am lost, turned upside down, unsure.
    I dissolve.

    I do not wish to consume you,
    breathe you in as oxygen,
    and spit you out as carbon dioxide.
    I would change you to your very core;
    this is your fare warning.

    Submitted on 2011-02-23 00:34:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh yeah... I probably should have put in the description what this is about! Recently I got out of a two-year relationship so my best guy friend decided to tell me he's been in love with me for a year....
    | Posted on 2011-02-23 00:00:00 | by Roula | [ Reply to This ]
      I quite enjoyed this, however at the beginning I was slightly confused but that is what made me want to read farther on. Very well written, and nice use of words. Lovely job!!! I especially liked the ending :) )O(
    | Posted on 2011-02-23 00:00:00 | by cherrywillow | [ Reply to This ]

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