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    dots Submission Name: Rivers Enddots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 276
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsRivers Enddots

    The stone of this heart cast into a hint of eternity

    A lagoon of ripples to those distant stars
    In a sprinkled miasmas dust of ages
    Withholding with their silence
    To their far-flung beaches
    Where the lonely feet of shipwrecks tread
    Leave the mariners of flotsam
    To float in reveries into the rivers end

    She is sleeping a tourniquet of streams
    And the far call of the boarders
    Echo from the shoreline
    Amid the lights and fields of unwanted night time
    Always with the deceptive flow
    With their powder and their debris to glide on by
    Vanishing within the current of those distant stars

    And I am driftwood
    With only the horizons destination
    Upon the rigmarole of waves I fall
    Rising just in time to see the suns reflection
    No more than a satellite to the taste of salt
    I dream of nothing more
    When to the sea she reaches the rivers end

    Only emptiness
    In the wake of the moon and her silver dress
    Will it bring this broken keel
    And finally to the rocks where dreams which come to rest
    Speak of darkness and the sand
    An hourglass to turn their gentle hand
    And vanish within the dust of the distant stars

    She is sleeping a taut and aching wish around these heartstrings
    The far boarders eternally give their call
    Just an echo from the shore
    Amid the homes and lights the fields of night times end
    But; always with deceptive flow
    Those lost beyond their own return
    As I fade into depths
    And reach the rivers end

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