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    dots Submission Name: Love in Vaindots
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    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 54/139/173
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 565
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsLove in Vaindots
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    I watched it happen from the stars.
    The way every rain drop fell.
    Collected in the tiniest of jars,
    With they're own story to tell.

    The moonlight grabbing at my coat,
    And the breeze swaying through my hair.
    So high I could float,
    And away with the night, like this gentle air.

    I felt your touch on my hand,
    The way your fingers closed around mine.
    In the brilliant storm of our land,
    Your eyes did shine.

    I lost myself again,
    Lost in your eyes.
    I felt the end,
    Coming in the darkened skies.

    And when all hope seemed gone,
    I remembered you by me.
    Locked in embrace for so long,
    I forgot I could see.

    Beautiful... Gorgeous.
    Love in vain.




    Submitted on 2011-02-23 15:26:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sounds like you were taking advantage of something, then suddenly remembered what you had. its a good write
    | Posted on 2011-02-26 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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