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    dots Submission Name: Intentionallydots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 861
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    Description:
       to ma baby


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    dotsIntentionallydots
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    When you leave close the door
    I don't want you to see me crying
    On the floor

    Everything you said before
    Is ringing through my head
    I should have done more

    I was so in love with you
    I didn't know you asked me to
    Be there for you

    Sorry baby, I didn't mean to hurt you
    Don't walk from me, is there anything I could.. do
    To bring you back to my arms

    Blinded by your love you see
    You know that you are always before me
    If I make a mistake
    Know I didn't mean to; not intentional...ly


    S.H.




    Submitted on 2011-02-23 22:00:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this sounds pretty personal and deep we will all have some of these moments that you do find something about yourself that you never new existed
    well written right from the gut
    good emotions

    sandman
    | Posted on 2011-02-24 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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