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Author: Cordell
ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
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Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /Sorry
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to ma baby


When you leave close the door
I don't want you to see me crying
On the floor

Everything you said before
Is ringing through my head
I should have done more

I was so in love with you
I didn't know you asked me to
Be there for you

Sorry baby, I didn't mean to hurt you
Don't walk from me, is there anything I could.. do
To bring you back to my arms

Blinded by your love you see
You know that you are always before me
If I make a mistake
Know I didn't mean to; not


Submitted on 2011-02-23 22:00:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this sounds pretty personal and deep we will all have some of these moments that you do find something about yourself that you never new existed
well written right from the gut
good emotions

| Posted on 2011-02-24 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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