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    dots Submission Name: "The Edge Of Never"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 2383/1715/240
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dots"The Edge Of Never"dots
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    They had passed the edge of never
    when she smiled at him one day
    and the gulf that was between them
    seemed to suddenly go away.

    Theirs was a love that never
    could have happened in those days
    when the help didn't mix with gentry
    it just wasn't the southern way.

    But, some things just seem to happen!
    Some things are meant to be!
    Cupid's little arrows
    change things that couldn't be.

    Thus the genteel lady
    was smitten by the charm
    of the handsome groom and horseman
    who tended her daddy's farm.

    And thus a chapter was written
    as the Sun set in the west,
    a Southern rule was broken
    and it was but for the best.

    They loved each other dearly
    it was plain for all to see
    they had broken a tired tradition
    for all eternity.




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      Sigh... I love the simplicity of this write! I love that it defies social norms with confidence!
    Its an inspiration.
    Lovely write.


    Fana
    | Posted on 2011-07-22 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Ron.. I loved your poem " The Edge of Never".
    It was so romantic and painted such a picture of yesteryear. Took us back in time and reminded us of how far we have come. Love shouldn't have boundaries. It was well written too, flowed nicely I enjoyed reading it. Could feel the love. You have a way of putting your thoughts down in verse... that i love... Desi
    | Posted on 2011-07-13 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]
      Hooray for keepINg the cowboy/rebel romance alive ~*~ with John Wayne Smiles to Share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-05-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      A charming piece. Love knows no boundaries or borders, and this piece illustrates that in such a nice way...
    | Posted on 2011-05-22 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good Ron, a gentle reminder to us all, NEVER is a word made by man, eventually all rules can be brokeN for the simple thing called "LOVE".
    | Posted on 2011-04-16 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      It's been a while since I have commented on one of your poems so I thought I would stop by and see what you've been writing about these days. A well written love poem, and one with a happy ending too! Very nicely done!
    | Posted on 2011-03-22 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Ron Cole as usual a pleasure to read your posts. I need not say anything else.

    BG
    | Posted on 2011-03-18 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]
      "passing the edge of never" ia great idea as well as a great phrase. This is the kind of verse that brings instant joy.

    Also its a long story told in a few stanzas... both of them conquered fear,,, the worst fears,,, to ultimately win their love.

    Lovely!!
    | Posted on 2011-03-16 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      (on the veranda)
    Lawd, the scandal!
    ~frantic fanning~


    It does seem that the rigid standards of yesterday are bending more easily, but in the old days, a romance like this was taboo...shocking.
    The idea that love can conquer all is well shown here!

    Another lovely work to add to your collection, Ron!
    | Posted on 2011-03-04 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhhhh.....a love story with a happy ending........made my day reading this one Ron. Great story woven into a fine verse indeed.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2011-03-03 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Breaking ruled, changing tradition, very well incorporated into the theme of 'love'.
    Reading this was very enjoyable. Thanks
    | Posted on 2011-02-28 00:00:00 | by Abass | [ Reply to This ]
      Another great poem by you Ron. It is very true love just happens and it is God's benevolence.
    | Posted on 2011-02-27 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      ohh reminds me of an old western novel were the rich woman falls in the love with the handsome stable man. good write!
    | Posted on 2011-02-26 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm normally not a fan of rhyming poems but this I kept reading this one. The syllables in the 3rd stanza seem a little off with "eternity". Also, maybe try and think of a different word so you don't use eternity twice in such a short poem.
    | Posted on 2011-02-24 00:00:00 | by Roula | [ Reply to This ]


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