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Kiss


Author: DiamondTears
ASL Info:    20/F/Wa
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 66 /109 /57
Words: 39
Class/Type: Misc /Romance
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Description:


The feeling is like poetry.


Kiss



To melt into a kiss,
Everthing around you dims,
Just two souls,
Brushing, Nerve to nerve,
Swelling, pounding heart.
Mind blank but passionate.
Eyelashes touching,
Lips crushing, but gentle.
Like feathers on wind.
Caught in a wave,
Swept away.




Submitted on 2011-02-24 16:14:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  yep thats what an awaited kiss feels like. well done. makes me want to go make out with a hot stranger.. lol jk.. =P
| Posted on 2011-04-11 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]
  That's a lot of kiss. You catch the gentle but crushing thought with the feathers and wave swept away imagery perfectly. Nice work.
| Posted on 2011-02-25 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
  i like "brushing, nerve to nerve"

"eyelashes touching"

"lips crushing, but gentle"

paradoxes, oxymorons...

the power of a gentle kiss...butterfly kisses...barely touching physically, but incredible power emotionally...
almost too much...like a gentle storm..

that sweeps us away in its intensity, yet feels safe at the same time.
| Posted on 2011-02-24 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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