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    dots Submission Name: At The Edge Of My Seat [Rated: R]dots
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    Author: DearlyDeparted
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211/290/189
    Words: 283
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Something sexy... lol.
    I was just having one of those days. Yes this actually happened. I do have these moments.. And I'm not ashamed of it. :P


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    dotsAt The Edge Of My Seat [Rated: R]dots
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    I am a victim of lust.
    My desire knows no bounds.
    Biting my lip,
    I attempt to detach my mind from my body.
    Fail miserably...
    a blushing of pink covers my skin.
    My breath quickens along with the hard rhythm of my heart.
    A knot forms low with the pit of my stomach.
    I feel the pulling at my body as if water reseeding int the ocean.
    Building ever so slowly, sucking the very breath from my lungs.
    Feeling so overwhelmed, seeming just at the moment of unconsciousness; the wave curls and smashes back down.
    Swallowing me whole, engulfing all my senses.
    Warmth begins to resonate between my thighs.
    As my slit starts to moisten, I shift in my seat.
    Big mistake.
    Liquid cream slips out from heated lips, and onto silk panties.
    The wetness spread, soaking me to my clit.
    I barely noticed the unintentional rocking of my hips, until the cool, damp silk started riding deeply into my folds; pressing tightly to my already swollen bud.
    Quickly crossing my legs, I try to reduce the sensual constriction my underwear created.
    Though it did nothing more than add pressure.
    I run a hand through my hair, and let out a desperately, frustrating sigh.
    Clinching my jaws, I scream mass waves of random hysteria to distract my brain from pleasure.
    Tapping my foot, counting to 50 by odds; I begin to reign it back in.
    I peer around the room with just my eyes.
    Three men, all ignorant to the fact that I was just mere moments from climax.
    My mouth quirks into a grin, cheeks burning with blush.
    I quietly laugh to myself,
    "Ahh, what it is to be a woman..."




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      Oh my goodness, I think I almost climaxed reading that,

    Nice write,

    Will
    | Posted on 2011-08-30 00:00:00 | by WarmGun | [ Reply to This ]
      X.x just super. -and really, really sexy. i do suggest removing or replacing the word 'underwear' with a word with less of a stigma of dudeliness and schoolyard taunts...

    a few that would work since you already used the best one ('panties', lol); 'underthings' or you could put the type of panties you're describing, be them boyshorts or a thong or bikini cut... basically anything but underwear, lol!

    or you could shorten the line by saying... ummm... '...constriction created by this involuntary occurrence' or some sh!t, something more abstract, maybe... a few minor corrections for you, as well: line 5, i think you may want to say 'failing' instead of 'fail', it makes more sense structurally. and line 9, 'reseeding int the ocean' should be 'receding into the ocean'.

    don't let me fool you, though! i do love absolutely everything about this! it actually made me ummm, REALLY horny, for lack of better words... GREAT job. ~Syn
    | Posted on 2011-04-05 00:00:00 | by Syn | [ Reply to This ]
      Bwahahahahahaaa! The typical response from this is wtf.In a hilarious way.No shame in your game eh haha.As of who else was around I would like to know what were you thinking as far as people witnessing goes.I would face palm the hell out of myself had I did this in public lol.This cracks me up again, since it's the third time I've come across to read it.
    | Posted on 2011-03-11 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      I....I like it! I'm not gonna lie. The sensual description was pro. And the climax(no pun intended) was just brilliant, ok I lied pun was definetly intended. But seriously, good write.
    And damn straight it's rated R, children beware
    | Posted on 2011-03-01 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      geez i dont know what to say. i just wanna ask where were you? and what were you doing?
    | Posted on 2011-03-01 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]


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