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    dots Submission Name: Tom & Katiedots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 485
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 838
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       Young Love


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    dotsTom & Katiedots
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    Tom and Katie met one day, as they passed the school house gate
    Katie she was 7 then, and Tom, had just turned 8
    He marvelled at her hazel eyes, and flowing ponytail
    She gave to him a cheeky grin, which made Tom turn quite pale

    In the classroom they sat side by side, and held hands every day
    They wrote each other loving notes, with crayons of blue and grey
    At dinner time, they shared their lunch, and fruit juice from a can
    Katie played the loving wife, and Tom, he played the man

    Tom used to call for Katie, and he walked his girl to school
    He carried Katies pencil case, with crayons, pen, and rule
    If ever it was raining, Katies brolly, Tom would hold
    And he gave to her his coat whenever, she was feeling cold

    They used to walk out in the park, in the sun and in the rain
    Katie brought her dolly, and young Tom, he took his train
    The two were so inseparable, just like two turtle doves
    Two little people of this world, and they were so in love

    One morning, Katies mummy sat her daughter on her knee
    She told her theyd be moving soon, far out across the sea
    Katie cried a million tears, and pleaded with her mum
    To stay right here and never move, cause she was in love with Tom

    Her mummy said to Katie, she was too young to know her mind
    She told her that in years to come, she would leave Tom behind
    She said young kids cant fall in love, and Katie soon would see
    In the years ahead, Tom would become, a distant memory

    Before she left him, Katie and Tom, arranged for one last date
    They kissed each other one more time, just by the school house gate
    They made a vow to meet one day, and to never break the chain
    Kate gave Tom her dolly, and Tom gave to her his train

    Twenty years had passed, as Tom walked by the school house gate
    His thoughts were with his Katie, who was nearly 28
    As he turned around, he saw two hazel eyes and flowing hair
    A teardrop fell, as he now knew, his Kate was standing there

    They hugged and kissed each other, by the school gate in the rain
    Tom held Katies brolly, as they hugged and kissed again
    Exchanging train and dolly, they set off to live one life
    With Tom, a loving husband, and with Kate, his loving wife

    They lived a life so full of love, a love that was so strong
    Katie knew that they had proved, her mummy to be wrong
    Two little children fell in love, and it grew stronger everyday
    Theres a lessen here for everyone, true love never goes away




    Submitted on 2011-02-27 18:41:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It should be published! :D Its so good! Loved it! Faved it! :D

    Your writing style is very good. I learn from writing masters such as you! :D
    | Posted on 2011-03-04 00:00:00 | by ShadowsnLights | [ Reply to This ]
      this is an absolutely fantastic love story, with delightful scansion and rhyme as well! This is a classic, with everything a good love poem could possibly have.

    Take a bow on this one Frank, because it is amazing!
    | Posted on 2011-02-28 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      awe this is such a cute piece. it gives one that true love exist even though threw scoiety and previous heartbreak tells us that it not possible. to find that one person who is the other half of you. great write my friend i love it for all that it is. thank you for sharing this piece with us. i am sure many more with fall inlove with this write as well...Joy
    | Posted on 2011-02-28 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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