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    dots Submission Name: come and fadedots

    Author: myonlysalvation
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 41/48/42
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Childrens
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    dotscome and fadedots

    had another dream-
    just like the last-
    and i just close my eyes tight
    and let the pain run its coarse
    beneath it's hollow pathway it's paved
    through my stomach.....
    and then out through eroded veins.
    .Restless sleep.
    and another regret to wrap in crimson fade.

    just come and take him
    i know i'm gonna lose him

    just another dream-
    so let's rehearse-
    back to where i am still sifting through
    the ruins
    back to where i am picking out the pieces of another broken knife
    another closing of the tide
    ashes formed our perfect picture-
    it's so hard to let go of,
    the tie that binds
    pick up the pieces. when you are left for dead.
    it's just another piece of regret
    ..i get, to drownd out in crimson fade

    just come and take it
    i know i am going to lose it

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