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    dots Submission Name: Vivid Visionsdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 407
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 842



    Description:
       Still warming up since yesterday... finally found my password, remembered it when I was getting high...
    So basically when they say drugs are bad, well this is one occasion were they are wrong kids... Enjoy!


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    dotsVivid Visionsdots
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    Sometimes I lose enthusiasm,
    To let lose and fuck paper and pen,
    Spill orgasms,
    Over ruled lines,
    To the million or power of ten;

    Reality snaps back, and I feel forced,
    To sit back and relax,
    If my words were to endorse,
    My life and my attributes,
    It would reach a climax,
    In the higher of altitudes;

    I'm stupid crazy when words,
    Try to foreplay with me,
    I commit adultery with metaphors,
    So God forgive thee,
    If my sanity is not recognized,
    No more;

    I call these vivid visions,
    When the need to confess,
    Becomes an ambition,
    And under stress,
    And false figures,
    Known as fictitious,
    I humble myself to thoughts,
    So submissive.





    Submitted on 2011-03-01 22:21:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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