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    dots Submission Name: When I Was Downdots

    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       Just reminiscing when I was down to the bottom, and I had people that did me wrong, well this is how I feel about that... In Your Face... HaHaHa

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    dotsWhen I Was Downdots

    When I was down,
    Nobody seem to bother,
    It must have been hard,
    To hit the ground,
    Even harder ,
    When I was Drowning,
    In shallow waters;

    Asphyxiation in the least,
    When there's no help at hand,
    You say you tamed the beast,
    Yet it becomes the solid foundation,
    Of the man;

    And why when I was alone,
    People decided to leave me unnoticed,
    You suddenly changed your tone,
    and still happen to have,
    An excuse and motive;

    When I was down,
    I felt the need to gain my paces,
    Suddenly all the smiles turned to frowns,
    In the same familiar faces.

    And yet I still remember when I was down.

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