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    Author: JAILBYRD22
    ASL Info:    22/F/KY
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 9/11/12
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    When you walk in the door
    The breath leaves my lungs
    As you move closer
    My mouth goes dry
    Only you can quench my thirst
    But my body just waits
    For your embrace
    My legs feel weak and heavy
    My bones are locked in place
    They wont budge a single inch
    I want to run into your arms
    But my legs hold me captive
    Its pointless to try
    Now the butterflies return
    To the pit of my stomach
    A chill runs up my spine
    Im covered with goose bumps
    Once you place me in your arms
    I cling to you
    And wrap myself in your warmth
    Im so glad
    Your home.




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      Fantastic.
    Love this a lot, it's silly to feel that just when someone you love comes home, but it's the best feeling in the world:)
    | Posted on 2011-03-03 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]


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