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    dots Submission Name: The Go-Betweendots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 354
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsThe Go-Betweendots

    Psssst ¡

    Did you know that the sublime petaled kisses
    Of each could spin your heart to an aching mountain
    Where worshiped on the pedestal of Earth
    Such breath would utter your divinity

    Ahhh ! I have collected these tremulous drops of passion
    And coiled them in the blood of love
    Stained their beauty upon the canvas of flesh
    With such colours that could sigh; a wish

    Have you dug so deep into your soul
    That you found me in your own shadow
    And there I walked constantly
    The very light, which was cast upon your footsteps

    All tremble before the interrogations of this tenderness
    No spoken word, no touch in its body can contain
    Yet precision unequivocal issues on my fingertip
    And each vowel of love to be written in my breath

    Come now, succour to this font, your main stream, my fountain
    It is I, who by your parody remind you of heaven
    So tell my lover to bring the fire
    And in flames nestle us in the crucible of desire

    Psssst !

    Did you hear of such sensuous velvet
    Where on the etched sweat woke the beast in you
    I gathered you there in pulsing darkness
    Where my sanities madness would consume you

    I am the penumbras deepest wanton
    Upon the bed of crushed roses and thorns
    Lay panting, my lips parted, my legs, open
    A taught tourniquet of wrapped inside my visions

    Such is the hunger consummate
    To tear in desperation from the desperate throat
    That lays before me with it’s arching back
    And laid bare upon the soul I would devour

    Each flash awakens in stroboscopic skin
    Soft, gentle and seething rakes it fingernails through your mind
    To shudder the darkest of tactile
    And eat and drink its fill upon submissions brow

    Come now, pass beyond the constraints and veils
    It is I, who by your parody remind you of heaven
    Go tell my lover of consuming flame
    And of the shuddering night whispering our name

    Submitted on 2011-03-02 12:10:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Now that's what I like to see. Straight from the heart. It honestly goes a little deeper into the romantic side of poetry than I like to go but that in itself is a dying style of writing. I'm glad to see there are a few people out there still willing to take the extra step and keep this style going. kudos for that
    | Posted on 2011-03-02 00:00:00 | by Silencer | [ Reply to This ]

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