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    dots Submission Name: A Conversation With A Rosedots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1089
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsA Conversation With A Rosedots
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    Oh fairest flower of fairest form
    So majestical and true
    Oh fairest flower would you mind
    If I sat and talked to you
    I will tell to you a tale of love
    So rich and true divine
    It happened not that long ago
    And this tale of love is mine

    I feel that we have met before
    On perfect summer days
    You remind me of my one true love
    In oh so many ways
    As I sit here and I look at you
    My memories untwine
    Revealing thoughts of wanton love
    That once were hers and mine

    Your form reflects the way my love
    Portrayed herself with grace
    The contours of your petals
    Are the smile upon her face
    Your intoxicating fragrance
    Is the perfume she once wore
    It fills my body and my soul
    Right now just as before

    Your colour is her bonnie hair
    Like a rainbow set at night
    The bluish tinges on your leaves
    Are her eyes that shone so bright
    Drops of dew remind me of
    The tears that she once cried
    But now they are invisible
    Like your dewdrops that have dried

    You and my love both close your worlds
    When darkness does bestow
    You hide your forms at eventide
    And bow your heads so low
    Your thorns are very hard to see
    Hidden by a sprawling leaf
    Reminds me of the way my love
    Was happy to deceive






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      HOO RAH !! for a master piece, Frank you've got a FAVORITE in this piece, a keeper.
    ED.
    | Posted on 2011-04-16 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm with latentlylyrical on the ending...

    oh, yes, you are so much like her...and in the end...i am too smart to go through that again...you like she, a deception...

    and i ended up with thorns the last time..not again..

    i am responding to this piece but really to several of yours i have read...

    the consistency really strikes me...your rhyme is so natural i hardly feel it...

    i am not a rhyme fan...unless it is done in a way to just sort of sneak up on me..yours does..

    the flow is always smooth..and those who try to do this kind of poetry often stumble on certain lines and throw the reader off rhythm..you just don't do that...

    i really tap my foot to your work...and feel there is such depth to the words..

    now, i think i will go outside and talk to my flowers.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-03-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh. My. GOSH!!! This piece. The symbolics in it are VERY powerful! Beautiful! I love this one! :D
    | Posted on 2011-03-04 00:00:00 | by ShadowsnLights | [ Reply to This ]
      This is excellent! The Rose is such a perfect symbol of love, with stunning beauty and intoxicating form and fragrance, but hidden beneath its leaves are cruel thorns capable of inflicting much pain!!!

    This one is brilliant, and all of your work is outstanding! A favorite!
    | Posted on 2011-03-03 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, Frank! You've totally surprised me!
    Well, I'm not at all surprised that this poem has all the flawless rhythm and grace of your usual work...you always write lovely love poems...
    but, the last line is the kicker.
    Brilliant end.
    And, it's not only shockingly different in tone from all the previous lines, but it's quite a change from your usual joyful and content tone in your love-themed work.
    So, another wonderful Frank Maguire piece.
    Wonderful with a twist.
    Fantastic.
    | Posted on 2011-03-03 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]


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