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    dots Submission Name: unspoken promise, release my heartdots

    Author: Oracle
    ASL Info:    24/ F /NY
    Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 423/313/46
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsunspoken promise, release my heartdots

    what is this feeling
    this sensation of needing
    the crave and the burn aching deep within

    it makes me cry and laugh and scream
    deeply moves me
    beyond the realms of all those other things

    makes me dream again and remember the days of wonder
    moves me deep
    awakening an age old hunger

    slated movement on the one, two count...
    dancing to the samba...
    deeply, mournfully missing those swaying steps

    it all makes me cry in the evening of night
    brings sorrow in the twilight of flight
    the sheen, the flick of moisture in the eye
    the journey on midnights train, completed when your call has began

    did we share dreams in vain… you've made decisions again, without me
    i won't go down since you said no... release me from this promise, unspoken
    i will rise... i won't be broken
    release my heart

    Submitted on 2011-03-02 22:22:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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