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    dots Submission Name: Easter Egg Challenge dots
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    Author: S.A.M.
    ASL Info:    26/f/xx
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 476/419/137
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 546
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    Description:
       A friend gave me a poetry challenge last Feb. it took me till tonight for the poem to hit me and he had done forgot the challenge but I did it. This is my poem about a metaphorical eater egg. Enjoy and please comment.


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    dotsEaster Egg Challenge dots
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    3,000 miles an hour
    down a dead end road
    that forked 4,000 and a half miles ago
    only 1999.7 miles to go
    and in the distance ever growing
    a large dark spheric spec
    fast approaching now just a bit closer
    as paved dashes weave to one
    the form becomes distinct and odd
    an egg I do draw near
    visions one by one have been painted on
    the tip tie-dyed with vibrant colors
    with a flowing stream is divided
    from the darker base that flows
    some jagged dips and dots of Crayola
    barley survived atop the night sky scene
    scattered with rough diamonds
    and broken hearts
    the bottom depicts a monumental thriving oak
    above and to the right a reversed pine
    and on the other upside down
    what once was a tree in its own right
    now dying, falling by the moonlight
    across the artwork upon the pelt
    curves and twirls an old brick road
    slamming down upon the breaks
    I try to preserve this masterpiece
    of course it was to little much to late
    cracking down the middle this egg of life
    falls to the sides
    all that is left standing . . .
    a picture of a child's electric pink car
    and two white haired men on bended knee
    kneeling beside of a 3 year old me




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      I can't believe it. You did it. and it was really awesome. many many kudos. this is actually really awesome. and this is a terrible comment.
    | Posted on 2011-03-03 00:00:00 | by DarkGunslinger | [ Reply to This ]


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