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    Author: ShadowsnLights
    ASL Info:    25 f canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.24 - 71/107/66
    Words: 475
    Class/Type: Story/Broken
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       Based on a True Story... My own...


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    She lies there, transported back to a time when things were not so simple... Like a movie, the images in her head start to move.

    The memories of her mother's despondency and neglect... The mother that never was. The mother that didn't protect her. Absent...

    The neglected child, she locked herself away in her own head. To keep pretending that things were not so bad. That fairy tales were true. That love existed, maybe not in her own life, but somewhere...

    To keep fighting the Evil that took over her family. To survive the Darkness that robbed her of her sunshine. To be able to breathe again, maybe just for one more day. She became more and more withdrawn...

    Every time the hands that soiled her were felt, she would go away to that special place. She would lie there with her eyes closed, and just float away to another world. A world where none of This was happening. In her own head she was happy. But as soon as reality came back, the pain and shame would flood her...

    Reality... What is reality? Just a broken world... With broken people, creating more broken people... She wants no part of it. So she keeps herself locked away in her mind...

    She wants to run to the ends of the earth and SCREAM out all the rage that burns her soul away... But instead she lies there, closing her eyes yet again. The Sad Movie of her Life keeps replaying itself over and over...

    The memories of a past that haunt her still... Closing her eyes, a tear slips past her eyelashes... Always, closing her eyes...

    Too afraid to open them, she decided to numb herself... Drugs took control of her life, till she became a slave. The willful bondage. The accepted defeat. The wanted destruction...

    Suicide, now a friendly thought. Death, now an eager promise. She thinks "I am already dead. What difference will I make? If I am here or not? Who will care? No one..."

    Her mother? Her brothers? Her friends? They all have their own problems... She doesn't want to burden them with her own... So she keeps silent... Locking herself away in her mind...

    Till one day, a friend who saw into her eyes, all that she hid, rescued her... He saw the emptiness in her life, the sadness in her heart, the rage in her actions, the hollowness in her soul...

    Taking her away from her empty life, he gave her a second chance. A new beginning. Hope.

    So as she traveled with him, the Dreams of a bright future became stronger... Looking forward to her Destination, she could feel her heart again. There was warmth in her soul. She could see...




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      i hope that this new friend accompany her forever, understand her and not prove himself just another frivolous guy who play with emotions and run off... i hope they conquer their personal demons together and forgive each other for lapses every human is prone to...

    i am so touched with this, thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2011-03-03 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]


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