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    dots Submission Name: Reflectionsdots

    Author: ShadowsnLights
    ASL Info:    25 f canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.24 - 71/107/66
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    As I ponder my reflection
    I see there the infection

    A sad and bleeding heart
    A soul thats torn apart

    The me that you think you see
    She is never to be truly free

    Abused and neglected
    I can see it all reflected

    Thrown away after the act
    I run away from the fact

    That my life is in shambles
    And that my mind rambles

    All my thoughts haunting
    All my dreams taunting

    Waiting for my freedom...

    Submitted on 2011-03-03 01:23:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      chill girl! you are much better than this.
    | Posted on 2011-03-10 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well written indeed. To tell such a story in rhyme is very difficult......you did it perfectly.

    Frank .
    | Posted on 2011-03-04 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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