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    dots Submission Name: Letting Go (A Poem to my Friends)dots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 590/805/389
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    dotsLetting Go (A Poem to my Friends)dots
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    Lately, I don't know which path to go
    Feels like I'm losing hope
    Feeling trapped and alone

    Something keeps pushing me to the side
    Telling me that everything's alright
    Move forward and you'll see a light

    Walk with me
    Even talk to me
    Maybe just to see
    How is everything

    I just know
    Its better letting go
    Another wall in front of me
    Breaking down piece by piece

    So scared of life
    Absolutely petrified
    Can't let its thorns take a bite
    Not while I'm living life
    Not while everything feels right

    Walk with me
    Even talk to me
    Be my Remedy
    Show me what you see

    I just know
    Its better letting go
    Another wall in front of me
    Breaking down piece by piece




    Submitted on 2011-03-04 21:14:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2011-03-05 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't figure out how to comment constructively cause I don't see anything that needs to be changed on this. I think its very well written and I like the repetition of this
    I just know
    Its better letting go
    Another wall in front of me
    Breaking down piece by piece
    Very good write :)
    | Posted on 2011-03-05 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]


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