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    dots Submission Name: ... I Remeberdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Depressed
    Total Views: 504
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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       Every night although I work I go to college.. every night I don't dream I stay up and think someties cry.. I can't stop reliving it all


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    I remember those days as if it were yesterday
    I remember the abuse
    The denial that came with the abuse
    I remember the blinders she wore
    Due to his bank account
    Never mind her daughters safety
    I long to forget the weeks I taped all our conversation
    Little did he know?
    For I would soon be taking those tapes to the police station
    I wish to erase the memories of my entire drug use, drug over doses
    As well as that night I choose to end my life with that 12 gauge shot gun
    Each night as others are sleeping I am re-living
    I vividly remember when and where you touched me
    I distinctly recall my mother not helping me when in need
    All those nights and days I spend doped up on heroin, coke, and pills
    I can see those Emergency room lights now as they wheeled me in for surgery,
    Hear people ask me Why?
    Its all so distant yet so close as if these events aspired yesterday
    Why am I in such torment.




    Submitted on 2011-03-06 01:54:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this one spoke to me deeply. Ive been there have had it happen. It sux n u never get over something like that. Im not sure if this is a poem or a well metaphored story. I thinks very meaningful although it needs to be revised. If this is from a personal,experience then im sorry. Know,ur not,alone....have a good day
    | Posted on 2011-03-11 00:00:00 | by Rehian | [ Reply to This ]


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