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    dots Submission Name: Whydots
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    Author: dreamer37517
    ASL Info:    25/F/Bama
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 161/149/49
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 764
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 347



    Description:
       Its short and sweet. Random and real.
    I wrote it quite a while ago but cant seem to do anything with it, as far as changing it or making it longer.
    So Im just gonna post it.


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    dotsWhydots
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    Whats the point in saying i love you,
    When all I see is you breaking my heart.
    Why do I put myself thru this torture,
    When I usually try to avoid this part.
    Whats the point in saying I need you,
    When your only going to walk away.
    Why do I do this to myself,
    When I know Ill cry another day.




    Submitted on 2011-03-06 16:51:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      okay i can relate to this! like someone told me today it is a little too straight to the point but if that's how you feel and you are fine with it then keep it that way :) i would have like to see a little more effort and meat to it though. but thats only my opinion :)

    cheers!
    Kat
    | Posted on 2011-09-04 00:00:00 | by moonlitsky | [ Reply to This ]
      Aman to that!
    | Posted on 2011-03-06 00:00:00 | by Apteryx | [ Reply to This ]


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