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    dots Submission Name: Memoirs of a snowflakedots

    Author: ShiveringFire
    Elite Ratio:    4.9 - 328/84/22
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMemoirs of a snowflakedots

    From where this April rolled out
    In my blanched and crusted world!
    Like the first splatter of rain drops
    on a parched neglected tin shed
    Like the first shimmer of sunshine
    in the oldest caverns of earth.

    They came, they came,
    yes, together they came
    April, sunshine and rain
    Cleaving down their way
    Into the deepest gorges
    As if unable to resist the call
    Of the void, the thirst, the ache.

    Ah! April, rain and sunshine
    In a rivulet, they well combine
    The rivulet that now flows by me
    Like a silken, drowsing lullaby
    For long we had sought each other
    In the end, they found me a melting snowflake
    In the end, i found them a blooming rainbow
    And a place to peacefully melt in.

    Submitted on 2011-03-07 05:58:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      had to revisit this one....the title is so intriguing...and the poem filled with wonderous images...

    lol...i was thinking of the title...and imagining a 300 page book put out by one snowflake...with a lifespan of???? a few fleeting seconds...

    lots can be fit into a short time can't it?
    | Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      winter meets spring....like a relationship..someone cold and lonely coming from a broken affair meets someone warm, giving, loving, beautiful like a rainbow inside and out...and the rainbow melts his/her heart

    the thawing out of a heart in hibernation..

    what a way to use nature in allegory to love...at least that is my perspective...

    i really like this piece...
    | Posted on 2011-03-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      :) This is a good one, I wish I could write the happy things too.
    | Posted on 2011-03-09 00:00:00 | by TheInvisible | [ Reply to This ]

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