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    dots Submission Name: Ten past lovedots
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    Author: moaxcym
    ASL Info:    23/m/Pakistan
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 155/196/85
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsTen past lovedots
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    Hannah, I do not love you,
    More than I love the looming shadows of my past
    And it is not that I do not love you
    I love the darkest corner of my room better:
    The one dressed in cobwebs and crumbling plaster
    Haunted by ghosts that only make allies
    With old, defeated kings.
    It is not that I do not love you,
    But I cannot greet you,
    As a poet must greet the spring:
    With the garland of newly sprung verses,
    Perfumed with the passion of youth
    And thus, I must not love you, at all.




    Submitted on 2011-03-07 13:55:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it is a wonderful mesh of ironies and contradictions. in brief, you are saying, Hannah i don't love you but you inspire jokes and satire thats why i often think about you,,,

    enjoyed this one a lot!
    | Posted on 2011-03-07 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      great title. ten past love. (that would make a great blues song).

    and i love that it is 10 past. not 12 past or 2 past. but ten past.

    there is something here that is just so... so, unexplainable. the feeling.

    i think just the start here brings the reader exactly there. it's immediate. and just then, i make up my mind about the write.
    Hannah, I do not love you,




    and is it past? or pasts? (the formatting is wonky).


    'It is not that I do not love you,
    But I cannot greet you,
    As a poet must greet the spring:
    With the garland of newly sprung verses,
    Perfumed with the passion of youth
    And thus, I must not love you, at all.'



    all this is just so very good. and i wish i could explain why.

    anyhoo...





    | Posted on 2011-03-07 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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