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    dots Submission Name: Requiem for a Spring Nightdots
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    Author: moaxcym
    ASL Info:    23/m/Pakistan
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 155/196/85
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsRequiem for a Spring Nightdots
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    Under the mild heat of early spring air,

    I remember you as you were

    when we walked across golden fields, leading to

    tombs adorned with rampant worship.

    Threads tied to these holy shrines

    are like firmaments still, and burn in the delirious light

    of many a passionate lamps,

    ushering caravans of barren prayers,

    some mine, some belonging to the faceless throng;

    while I dance in a ruined tavern

    under the reign of the harvest moon

    with a desiccated heart, half-moon eyes,

    Hafez's verses, and a broken cup of wine.




    Submitted on 2011-03-08 14:30:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree this is a very detailed poem it draws a very vivid picture and you have a way with your words this is a verry good write.
    | Posted on 2011-03-10 00:00:00 | by JAILBYRD22 | [ Reply to This ]
      just as pretty, i think.



    'while I dance in a ruined tavern

    under the reign of the harvest moon

    with a desiccated heart, half-moon eyes,

    Hafez's verses, and a broken cup of wine.'




    simply marvelous, that.

    yup.

    poetic, even. (in the best possible way).

    (smile).








    | Posted on 2011-03-08 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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