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    dots Submission Name: Animal Kingdomdots
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    Author: Dalelord
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 22/23/8
    Words: 323
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1100
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1799



    Description:
       I wrote this song last night, as I as dicking around with words, while strumming a little tune on my guitar. This morning I added more words, and since its finished on a first draft, I posted it. The words reminded me of a Tom Petty style, so I kept going.


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    dotsAnimal Kingdomdots
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    Wanna be a crocodile, but in that river I won't swim
    Wanna be a bird, but I can't sit out on that limb
    Wanna be a giraffe, cause my friends say I should get high
    Wanna be a Dinosaur, but then I will have died

    :chorus:
    I wanna be a free
    From the way it should be
    I wanna be wild
    To get away from you child
    I wanna be whole
    I won't play a part in your role
    I wanna be me
    Cause thats the way I could be

    Wanna be a pirate, but I can't sail a ship
    wanna take a walk, but I don't wanna step in shit
    wanna be a dog, but you won't hear my bark
    wanna be a fish, but I don't wanna be eaten by a shark

    You want me in a suit, but then I cannot breath
    YOu want me at a desk, but I hate being undernieth
    You want me to be cool, but I have troubles being hip
    YOu want me To be big for your money, but on that road I'll slip

    :chorus:
    I wanna be a free
    From the way it should be
    I wanna be wild
    To get away from you child
    I wanna be whole
    I won't play a part in your role
    I wanna be me
    Cause thats the way I could be


    Lets go back now...

    You tell me write a song, to give to sing to him
    You tell me its alright, but the lights are oh so dim
    You tell me just take a puff, and everything'll be alright
    You say look at these bigs stars, don't you want their life?

    :repeat:
    No NO NO

    I wanna be me I wanna be free to live and flow

    NO NO NO

    The words come about but the sound is what I don't know....




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