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    dots Submission Name: Edgedots

    Author: Queen_of_spades
    ASL Info:    21/F/Nocturne
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 95/166/107
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 454
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 485

       I cannot describe...

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    Decadent seems appropriate
    for the way I feel at present
    to rake this blade across you
    might satisfy the edge
    I would never harm you
    just a tinge of pain
    kiss your wounds
    and lick them clean
    wince at the sting
    bandage you up
    begin your healing
    hold you in a warm embrace
    to know without a doubt
    even while I'm disturbed
    I very much still love you

    Submitted on 2011-03-09 10:57:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      okay this is scary...gave me a chill..

    reminded me of Clint Eastwood's "Play mist for me" and evelyn..

    made me think of a female Poe as the speaker...

    i want to know how far i would go to prove to myself that i love you..

    would i wound you and bring you back..or go to far..

    this also could go in another direction..

    suicide...sylvia plath kind of thing...take myself to the edge...
    cut the vein..turn on the gas..get close...but let myself live..and then write about it....

    i felt the heart beating beneath the floor...

    somebody stop me!

    | Posted on 2011-06-03 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      This shows the ideal image of heed.
    The way somebody could care for someone is astonishing.
    It's the beautiful way somebody could feel for someone unendingly.
    One thing that I can say for this piece, is;
    breif yet perfectly set.
    | Posted on 2011-03-09 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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