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    dots Submission Name: Crazydots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 375
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1014



    Description:
       Just something to meditate to.

    Rondo from Myspace wrote this song...

    This happens to be a lyric excerpt... forgot to give credit, where credit is due.

    Big shout-outs to Rondo.


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    dotsCrazydots
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    Have you ever woke up,
    Feeling like what the fuck,
    Am I doing here and your mind is stuck,
    Feeling like you're lost,
    Can't find your way,
    Disoriented don't know the time,
    Or day,
    Trying to recollect,
    Something familiar here,
    But you know there's one thing,
    Peculiar here,
    Not a stitch on your body,
    And you feel the brush,
    Of the woman laying next to you,
    Find it such,
    Then you exhale,
    What a surprise,
    When you move close,
    You get the butterflies,
    One of them days,
    That you can't conceive,
    Everything is lovely,
    Best believe,
    I think I'm in love,
    Should I tell her this,
    Or write it on a card,
    And mail her this,
    Only one thing is wrong,
    With this,
    Whole thang,
    I'm in the room all alone,
    And that's my cold end.








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