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    dots Submission Name: Please dont wait for medots
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    Author: Bloodlust86
    ASL Info:    24/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 56/49/53
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
    Total Views: 797
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 1013



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    dotsPlease dont wait for medots
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    I see you standing there, with the look in your eyes...wanting me to stay...I hear the pain in your voice when you ask me why I must leave...I look at you and respond with a simple its best for me to leave now...I turn my head and walk away with out showing a hint of emotion...only I know I am dying inside...I leave you a note on your bed with a simple request...Please don't wait for me to come back...I am not sure I will...I am not sure I can...It took everything I had to walk away...When in my deepest thoughts I never wanted to leave your side...Its been some time since I have moved on with my life and I begin to think of you when I hear a song on the radio...I begin to wonder how you are and what you are doing...So I pick up the phone I let it ring three times and then hang up..Did you see my name flash across your phone and remember who I was and what we once were or what I a forgotten memory...My only wish would be you found someone you could could love half as much as I once loved you...




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      Its well written but somehow it seems like a repro, something I have read and seen before. sry. Try to put more of yourself in between the lines, :-)

    | Posted on 2011-03-11 00:00:00 | by Kwanying | [ Reply to This ]


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