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    Author: trynfinity
    ASL Info:    38/f/California
    Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 149/145/91
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       What's left when love walks out


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    Trash

    I wake up to the darkness
    to desperation, I am alone.
    No longer are you beside me,
    your arms no longer home.
    Now I sit in screaming quiet in souless solitude.
    A constant battle with my demons my heart and mind a feud.
    Wishing I could change me
    could fix what isn't right.
    Knowing in truth it's useless
    I'll never be worth the fight.
    Once there was such safety
    a place I thought was true.
    Promises of love always forever
    I was a fool to dream of you.
    No longer there to save me
    only the darkness will I find. Unworthy of what you gave me
    I've become the trash you left behind.

    Heather Kemper February14,2011




    Submitted on 2011-03-10 15:44:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is tough to read...such a giving up...letting oneself lose a sense of worth because of another person...

    it is well done..some really good lines..."your arms no longer home"
    "screaming quiet" a nice oxymoron...might have been used a few times before, but fits here nicely.
    but this turns sadder for me when i read,
    "I'll never be worth the fight"

    no one is worth losing our self-esteem over...no one.
    | Posted on 2011-03-10 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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