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    dots Submission Name: Honey, Dovey...dots
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    Author: ShiveringFire
    Elite Ratio:    4.9 - 328/84/22
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 527
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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       Eyes talking to eyes...


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    dotsHoney, Dovey...dots
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    Yes, There you are, standing by the door
    With arms crossed, perhaps fingers crossed too.
    Your eyes ask, "What are you doing?"
    My eyes reply, "here, i am mixing up,
    Honey, saffron, rose petals, cinnamon and cardamom,..."

    Uh! i am trying to brew your kisses in a tea cup
    cus you are such a shy blushy bloke
    OH! How much i adore you!!!
    Come, i offer some of this to you,
    Fragrant and delicious, its like my kisses too
    Cus, you are such a shy, blushy sweetheart
    Oh!! How much I adore you.




    Submitted on 2011-03-10 23:44:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      just think if we could combine this mixture...oh the kisses would be....well...alas you are too shy to make a move...

    so i am expressing

    because i would like to be messing
    with you...
    would be cinnamon and saffron...to the taste and smell like roses as our lips touched...

    but you stand back, hesitant...scared of me? scared of us?

    not sure...

    but sure i like this poem immensely..

    it is very different..and open to different moods...
    frustration in a way...but attraction so strong there is no giving up...i will get to you yet..and we will share such passion..

    it's brewing, you just don't realize it yet.
    | Posted on 2011-03-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      it was sweet, however was it or poetry? i couldnt tell betwwen the ohs... and if you are speaking of a female i do not believe bloke was the right word for it...
    however i liked it good job
    | Posted on 2011-03-14 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]
      The way this came off was cute, funny, delightful, insightful and potent.Gee If there are a lot of females out there or even people for that matter who feel welcome to take the liking of the shy and innocent creatures who are also for the most part human just like us but that there is that thought of a closed book and someone who adores them, wanting to investigate the mystery in the most caring and loving way as of wanting and trying best to understand.

    I can dig it.Oh and the other thing is that it directs my thinking to a relationship position in life where eyes into eyes symbolize the time and moment.
    It's a wonderful snapshot you captured in your own heart and mind.

    Since the heart does not see, it feels.A pair of eyes just have a deep and profound role as the life's tour guide.-Chuckles-

    Nice picture.
    | Posted on 2011-03-11 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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