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    dots Submission Name: Healed with saltdots
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    Author: TalentedChild
    ASL Info:    17
    Elite Ratio:    1.85 - 19/81/106
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 560
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 570



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    dotsHealed with saltdots
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    I need a light from the darkness
    I need a cloak from the cold
    I need a rest from the tiring
    Travels of old

    I need a voice for my singing
    I need a hand for my deeds
    I need a shoe for my footsteps
    I need an I for my needs

    I need a hope for tomorrow
    I need to part from the past
    I need to care for today
    So I can love again

    I need a trust in my virtues
    I need to meet all my faults
    I need to face what can hurt me
    Fresh wounds healed with salt.




    Submitted on 2011-03-11 02:36:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really identify with this identity crisis of yours . We all need so many of these things you mention . I especially liked the last two lines . There are so many things about the human social condition that can hurt us . So many bad people . I'm not a masochist but they say salt makes a wound heal faster sting and all .

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2011-03-12 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems you are seeking lessons in contradictions.

    you have insight enough to glean light from the darkness.

    you have patience enough to grab warmth from the cold.

    it seems you are looking for revelations in pain. your courage is impressive like this poem.
    | Posted on 2011-03-11 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this one...

    especially the idea worked into the second stanza..although " a hand for my deeds" stops me...

    otherwise...it works so well...

    and the stinging ending...it takes pain to heal---
    | Posted on 2011-03-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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