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    dots Submission Name: Thought About (A Love/Forgiveness Poem)dots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 590/805/389
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThought About (A Love/Forgiveness Poem)dots
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    Lately
    I've been thinking about
    What you yelled out loud
    A slip up on your part

    Frankly
    I find it messed up
    For now I will just shut up
    As it's ripping out my heart

    Thought about
    All the things you said
    How much of it you meant
    Now it's hard to tell apart

    I thought about
    Walking out
    Giving up this relationship
    All my chips are spent
    You don't know
    Maybe you never will
    How much I'm loving you
    And how I'm easily killed
    By your words
    Hurtful, diabolical yells
    Words you shouldn't said
    Forgiveness would be my regret

    Can't analyze
    What I should do
    I'm scared of leaving you
    I don't have the time

    Maybe for today
    I will forget what you said
    I know it's something I'll regret
    It'll be harder to get your out my head...




    Submitted on 2011-03-12 20:25:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ty very much
    | Posted on 2011-03-19 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      It's always a mistake to stay, time is to precious to be spent with someone who doesn't treat you like you should be treated, great write.
    | Posted on 2011-03-14 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]


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