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Thought About (A Love/Forgiveness Poem)

Author: Cordell
ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
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Words: 145
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Thought About (A Love/Forgiveness Poem)

I've been thinking about
What you yelled out loud
A slip up on your part

I find it messed up
For now I will just shut up
As it's ripping out my heart

Thought about
All the things you said
How much of it you meant
Now it's hard to tell apart

I thought about
Walking out
Giving up this relationship
All my chips are spent
You don't know
Maybe you never will
How much I'm loving you
And how I'm easily killed
By your words
Hurtful, diabolical yells
Words you shouldn't said
Forgiveness would be my regret

Can't analyze
What I should do
I'm scared of leaving you
I don't have the time

Maybe for today
I will forget what you said
I know it's something I'll regret
It'll be harder to get your out my head...

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  ty very much
| Posted on 2011-03-19 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
  It's always a mistake to stay, time is to precious to be spent with someone who doesn't treat you like you should be treated, great write.
| Posted on 2011-03-14 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]

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