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    dots Submission Name: Changedots

    Author: AshleyDYoung
    ASL Info:    19/F/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 28/33/34
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Time is in essence the mother to us all.
    It raises us from a child and turns us into
    the adults we are today, and if not kept a close
    eye on it takes away the very life it helped create.
    Change is our father, offering us comfort when
    we've skinned our knee, or beating our little
    asses if we've talked out of turn. Well, mother and
    father, why is it that I always get punished
    when I've done nothing wrong?

    Submitted on 2011-03-12 21:58:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think we've all felt this way. this piece gives a tone of it being persistent which isn't good.

    is it a feeling of it being punishment(it's hard to understand anything specific with a slue of pronouns) maybe it's that feeling itself i'm seeing here. idk. the emotion carries well, change for the worse always blows. i'm not good with responive words, but i can handle ventilations. if needed. based on works between you and your fiancée it seems as though you two click very well. hopefully all you need is each other to lean on? idk. i guess if things are bad with no control, just keep it up.
    | Posted on 2011-03-12 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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