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    dots Submission Name: MY LOVE TIMELINEdots
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    Author: unwantedlove20
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 16/12/11
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 518
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       yes im a 12 year old in love.............and i know what im tlkin bout............plz comment N sorry for any incorrect spelling ((btw miske is supposed to b mistake))


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    dotsMY LOVE TIMELINEdots
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    5 years old: i walk into my new class scared and wanting to go back i look up at my mom and she smiles "go on...you'll be sure to love it" i take a couple steps in and notice that all eyes are on me i sit and put my head down afraid to show my fear when i hear a chair being pulled next to me as i looked into his eyes i only saw a friend on that same day we promised to be as close as possible.......but little did i know that promises can very often be broken.. 8 years old: he walks down the hallway and i cant help but smile and at night before i go to sleep i find myself thinking of him purposley to garantee he would be in my dreams... but i never really knew that i was digging my own grave.. 10 years old: i know that we're still friends but i feel us breaking apart i tell myself that i dont care but somewhere...somewhere deep i know that its not true...... just shook my head and walked away, big mistake? 12 years old: i think back to all the times i have made him smile i think back to when they said i liked hiM




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      Thank you so much
    | Posted on 2011-03-16 00:00:00 | by unwantedlove20 | [ Reply to This ]
      So sweet.... of all the things i read today, this one i loved the most :)
    | Posted on 2011-03-15 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      nice nice pretty nice lol i've known u 4 eva and i thinK this is the best and the most real poem u eva written godd job CHICA <3 !!!
    | Posted on 2011-03-14 00:00:00 | by celyk | [ Reply to This ]


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