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    dots Submission Name: On Displaydots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    A soul on display
    Crowding a heart
    Caught in the way.
    Indulged in the moor
    Of lovely images
    In every ray.
    Kissing the grass
    Caressing every blade.
    The sun reflecting
    Off my face like glass.
    I am a heart on display
    Crowding a soul
    Caught in the way.




    Submitted on 2011-03-14 12:55:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I believe this is beautiful Chris.
    If I am not mistaking you've described your perfect moment in sunlit glitz that is only for peaceful nature of the human being and nature itself.Lying down on blades of glory heh.

    I believe another good thing about me reading this is that it reminds me that I need to go to this place called Art Hill and just lie down on that hill and watch the fountain water of the pond further down spring out of the pipes.

    Like flora graphical..On a hill, as to see over something stunning that exerts a pull on the soul, a good taking of it with force.

    A soul on display to God's eye, reflecting rays onto the spiritually aware individual.

    Then there is the capitalization, every lines beginning could let the reader know that the piece has a significant purpose because it could have been written as though the writer meant every single word.

    Touchy moment of truth.Pretty nice.

    And keep your eyes good, don't need any UV rays damaging the imperative scopes.

    san---
    | Posted on 2011-04-11 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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