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    dots Submission Name: Saddness Crowneddots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSaddness Crowneddots

    I have a hand full of tears
    Hiding years within my palm.
    I'm gentle not to spill as I slowly stand.
    I don't want to disrupt the calm.
    I shouldn't have to carry these around,
    Am I bound and not allowed to let go?
    Weighed down
    My body becomes weary,
    Still crying my hands develop holes,
    Through which each tear seeps
    And leaks steadily unto the ground.
    Impacting the dust into mud,
    Developing a crown,
    Baptized and ordained
    By surrounding dust.

    Submitted on 2011-03-14 13:04:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I very much enjoyed this. It was interesting and the use of word I could relate to, found familiar. It is wonderful. ty for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-07-22 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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