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    dots Submission Name: Kissing the Moondots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsKissing the Moondots
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    The moon cried to me.
    So, I caught her tears
    And kissed her pale lips.
    She said, " My sister is full of need
    And she can't conquer the fears."
    I console her through this emotional fit.

    My hand full of tears,
    I softly caress her cheek
    As tears from cups fall to the ground.
    From that spot a single flower appears.
    I wonder if this is the answer we seek.
    From the budding flower
    Comes the most wondrous sound.

    The flower sang of a brighter day,
    Of golden corn that would feed the world
    And that happiness truly comes from within.
    The moon leaned in and asked,
    "What did it say?"
    At that moment I dried and curled
    And took the secret with me
    Into the wind.




    Submitted on 2011-03-14 13:13:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I see no reason for you to keep this a secret, :)

    I think that if you are going to console the moon by holding it (appeasing self indulging sorrow carried by the emotion you mentioned, with physical, also self induldging to senses) Then the solution here to truly appease the moon would be to share your enlightenment.

    Her sorrow spawns enlightenment, the physical awareness (her tears) create the flower (represents enlightenment through the suggestion of the mechanics of the flower and it's origin) manifested by the flower creates the metaphor for inner joy.

    To me the Speaker is exhibiting very typical humanistic characteristics, keeping enlightenment (as if it really could) for itself or into the wind.

    What I like about this is that it does carry a lot of meaning. It suggests a lot by it's content but the characteristics or ideals that you seem to be glorifying do not remain consistent with the maturity of enlightenment. And this could be about growth or represent it on some level. Either way I think it is very genuine. I enjoyed this piece. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-07-23 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Simply wonderful.

    The picture you painted was so vivid, I could see the tear drops coming from an eye that lays in the face of a cresent moon.

    Well done.

    ~KimbreRain
    | Posted on 2011-04-02 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely fabulous!!!! It carries the reader to an entirely new and unseen realm... and the description is awesome.

    Heart melting, exquisite, unearthly,... perhaps you took away the secret because you wanted her to discover it by herself.

    Most beautiful!
    | Posted on 2011-03-15 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      is the last line of first stanza "i console her through this emotional fit"?

    this took me by surprise, the ending...

    i saw someone letting himself get close to someone else...and then get too scared..

    consoling the moon...the sister, trying to be there for her...and then backing away at the end...
    the secret was too close...and he dried up and blew away in the wind..

    and thus the wind would cry again..

    quite liked this one.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-03-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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