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    dots Submission Name: Endearments of a Hermitdots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsEndearments of a Hermitdots
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    Out there lives a hermit
    Of cryptic and mystic occult.
    In written voice shouts:
    Strident, harmonious and marvelous notes.
    He exiles himself from people
    And watches their every move.
    Categorizes all their hearts in piles
    And deciphers their intricate moods.
    His skin glows with ink.
    Veering away from human contact.
    All he trusts, he believes from within.
    Only he knows how he'll truly react.
    He'll always write about
    People he don't know.
    So, they don't ruin his illusions.
    He can mold and shape their life,
    Without coming to the true conclusion.
    Because a beautiful person can be ugly
    And a kind notion turned to sin.
    Can turn an angelic person deceitful
    By not getting to know them.




    Submitted on 2011-03-14 13:19:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      people we never meet, people we only imagine...can't ruin our illusions, that's for sure...

    once we get to know them well, they always seem to let us down...or maybe we just expect too much from them...

    nice dark piece.
    | Posted on 2011-03-24 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      It is a unique poem, it seems to have a soul.
    | Posted on 2011-03-21 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you have some interesting insights here. However, I'm curious about your word choice with voiding. I think it may make more sense if you use the word "veering" instead. It is interesting to think, though, about our impressions of others and how we're so often wrong.
    | Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by Athalia | [ Reply to This ]


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