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    dots Submission Name: TAKE YOUdots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 665
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 491



    Description:
       feeling kinda wicked right now


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    dotsTAKE YOUdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I'm gonna have you
    I'm gonna have you
    I'm gonna have you

    IM GONNA TAKE YOU!!!!!!!!!!
    IM GONNA TAKE YOU!!!!!!!!!!
    IM GONNA TAKE YOU!!!!!!!!!!

    red rover red rover are you
    hearing the little kids
    blood curling screaming
    with there end trailing hanging
    its my personality
    so far from morelality
    its take a mind
    twisted like mine
    to get my mentality





    Submitted on 2011-03-14 16:31:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Like you recorded a passionate predator's insidious thoughts... overall enjoyable!
    | Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      ...

    An interesting piece, with layered meaning.
    Perhaps you need to go full circle with a line from the end as a starter line, to capture the meaning.

    -Kwanying-
    | Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by Kwanying | [ Reply to This ]


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