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    dots Submission Name: still illdots
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    Author: southernswagger
    ASL Info:    23/f/england
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 9/54/45
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsstill illdots
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    i think i have a sexually transmitted disease
    and my gums can't carry the weight of my teeth.
    my toe nails are black on both my feet.
    I have water retention on my left knee.
    If this sounds like it's up your street,
    then hit me up on e-harmony.




    Submitted on 2011-03-15 19:04:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Um. The irony here is staggering. It almost reminds me of Jack Prelutsky, only for adults. It's short enough that there's not much I can say as far as advice, but if you felt like inserting a stanza prior to this one, you could go on for a bit about previous, failed relationships and the crazy reasons why.
    | Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by Athalia | [ Reply to This ]


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