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    dots Submission Name: Why?dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
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       My boyfriends kids feel I am taking their dad's time away from them. But I've told the oldest just recently I'm never trying to take away your dad from you guys I hope you never feel that way. she told me she knew i wasn't... yet tonight i have found the truth out


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    dotsWhy?dots
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    Why do i always seem to fall short
    Contantly I am close yet I always end up disapointing
    I am enough for the select few
    but then again to those who matter most to me seem to never be happy
    Why is this I ask you
    Why can I never make those people happy
    Why can't my efforts and lengthly strides be noticed
    I am blunt with my intentions
    I am forth coming with my feelings and goals
    yet I cannot please them
    All I wish to do is just this...




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      Dont feel bad about this.. in the matter of kids, our efforts always seem to fall short... as Amma says, they will eventually start appreciating you.

    Quite a straightforward piece!
    | Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      being a good person is sometimes hard but when we keep being good to other people the start to appreciate us. sometimes change is hard especially for kids. but when you stay good to them, they realise the change wasn't that bad after all. it just takes a lot of work and convincing. good luck, dear.
    | Posted on 2011-03-16 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]


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