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    dots Submission Name: i didn't lose my minddots
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    Author: southernswagger
    ASL Info:    23/f/england
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 9/54/45
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsi didn't lose my minddots
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    I didn't lose my mind it fell apart
    this time it was real not art
    i thought i was going to drown
    in blood and fluid
    i would of worn a thorn crown
    but i'm a coward.

    blankets biscuits bedsocks
    tea pots bed pans stomach knots
    notebooks self help tablets
    doctors surgery up early mad house.

    i didn't lose my mind it ran away
    even sobriety couldn't make it stay
    i tried to keep it sweet with sedation
    but i nipped it in the bud before i gave it an addiction -
    i'm a coward,
    and i never could wear that crown of thorns.




    Submitted on 2011-03-15 19:28:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Poignant!!!

    tea pots bed pans stomach knots

    what an assortment!!! looks like a lot of depression! it looks like a defeatist or escapist poem at the first glance.

    but then it is spectacular... who wants to wear a crown of thorns... the pain is real, very real and well expressed.
    | Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty cool.
    | Posted on 2011-03-16 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]


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