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    dots Submission Name: im not your average girldots
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    Author: pyroskull
    ASL Info:    14/f/cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 150/213/70
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 937
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    Bytes: 888



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       i wrote this cuz i was bored.


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    dotsim not your average girldots
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    im not your average girl
    im not even close,
    i sit around and listen
    to slipknot screaming about a corps.
    my shirts have bands
    my pants have holes
    my shoes are so fuckd up
    they look as they flew in a tornado.

    posters all around,
    all demonic.
    CD's go on for miles,
    all satanic.

    im not your average girl
    im not even close
    im not your average girl
    you can tell by my clothes.

    i cover my face with my black hair
    covering most of my black eyeliner
    that i mark everywhere.
    my guitar is my grail
    and mick thomson is a god
    im a full on maggot
    and slipknot are my lords.
    cant you see im not the same
    cant you tell im not normal
    im not your average person at all
    im not your average girl.




    Submitted on 2004-07-28 13:52:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like it alot. rebelious and different. very original and i felt that the readers got to know more about ur uniqueness good job!
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by Ang | [ Reply to This ]
      This would present itself much better if you tried to put a rhyme scheme into this somehow. Then it would become more than just another "I want to be unique" teenage rant.

    By the way...I listen to Slipknot, too...although I don't like ALL of their songs... a lot of it is just senseless screaming, but they've got some awsome guitar rifts and a couple of good vocal songs...
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      Well well well, I never really liked the average girl but the girls girls I like are alot more frightening than you. The lyrix were alright but with lyrix the more the better. I can imagine though you don't play your guitar clean to this one, which is always a plus. now onto the content of the poem, in my old neighborhood girls with [censored]ed up shoes ripped pants and band shirt are VERY Average. But the world we live in has changed and so has the neighborhood on the southeast side. I can see that you aren't the average prep ass byatch, but you are the average slipknot fan. Thanks for the poem it reminded me of my old neighborhood.
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by SKillz_Heckle | [ Reply to This ]
      u sound kinda scary... no offense, im sure u want to be scary... do u like kill cows and offer them as a dark sacrafice to : Slipknot? That'd be funny... if i ever make a movie, youll be in it, and youll kill a cow for that band, Aight?
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by WD20x2 | [ Reply to This ]


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