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Open Minds, Guarded Hearts & Closed Hands


Author: Runes
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Open Minds, Guarded Hearts & Closed Hands



One little thing I'd like to leave behind, if I could find the hands
to close around it perfectly, who'd recognize and understand
how brightly it can burn a night, how soothing it can shade a day
but no one wants to risk the sparks, so they have
turned away.

In quiet lives, they claim their hearts beat best without
potential breaks,
and answer they have scorched themselves enough, refusing now to take
another chance of catching shooting stars, reversing gravity
and no one wants to risk that it will fail or, worse,
match perfectly.

Meanwhile, the lesser child-minds writhe and hiss,
writing excessively
of skies and oceans, taffy-pulled words desperate to show fealty,
and only in the glare of others' eyes do they think it fits well,
imagining themselves as rivers deep, instead of
shallow swells.

If only I could see it passed along to perfect hands, it might
become a Love so passionate, two hearts would easily ignite
and not be forced to beat in sync to match another's set demands
but after finding hearts that compliment such Love, they won't
clasp hands.




Submitted on 2011-03-17 05:54:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Okay, I took at second look into this and realized they can be related to two quotes.

l.
“An open mind leaves a chance for someone to drop a worthwhile thought in it”
ll.
Ummm gosh my quote mental rolodex has a cobweb on it lol.
“Always keep an open mind and a compassionate heart.” This one I know is by Phil Jackson, coach of the Lakers.The first one is unknown i read out of one of those chicken noodle soup little positive thinking type of booklets for ones pocket but at first I was trying to see if I could come up with a proper quote from your words.Failed by the way.

But I did understand it from a visionary aspect which makes me feel as though I didn't really get lost anywhere.

^_^ Tehe
| Posted on 2011-03-21 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
  Runes the third quarter of this is an appropriate settlement for why is it exceptional to the sensory structure and thinking.It stood out more to me, followed up by the final smooth finish.

"two hearts would easily ignite
and not be forced to beat in sync to match another's set demands
but after finding hearts that compliment such Love, they won't clasp hands."

Ummm I thought of trails of quotation.Like, one could be in there somewhere.

Elevated spark.
| Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
  love is never perfect, if we accepted that from the start...we wouldn't expect so much and be so devasted when we didn't get it...

and after so many burns we close ourselves off...hearts beat more easily alone...safer that way than having another heart touch up against ours...afraid of friction..but friction is good...and perfect is just a notion, an ideal....we get close as we can...but should accept that is how close to perfection we can get..

last line..."perfect hearts"???
| Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  Very perceptive! the first para looks like the beginning of a masterpiece,,, like a prelude to something great but now i'll read further.


okay... good... very deep actually. i understand where you are going with this... these hearts are perfect so they cant clasp hands. Their perfection may be their curse because they need no one to complete them.

but can there be a heart without emotional voids... can there be anything lika perfect heart. this piece is a comment on emotional perfection which is a contradiction in terms.
| Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]


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